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You are deep like an ocean
Let me explore yourself deeply
sinking and sinking , exploring
But my thirst increasing gradually
Inside you , I realized the fact
You hide and reveal yourself simultaneously
Don't panic about the high tides
Just make your moves strongly
In the end
It's very hard to be without you
but
I'll always be with you
Because you colorized my feelings so beautifully
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Very interesting concept, good imagery. One thing I would suggest is replacing '&'s with and's, it adds to the poem's beauty. Nice to read it
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Mood: Love ~Shussain86 Sep 1, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks a lot for your kind words. I have changed the &'s with and's as per your recommendation! I would love to have your comments for my another poetry "Swan" [link] Once again, thanks!
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*RowanLeeves Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is so deep and "personal". I can easily "become" the person who speaks.

I am not used to comment poems - sorry if I sound inappropriate.
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~Shussain86 Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Dear Kina, thanks a lot for your beautiful words...! You shouldn't be worried about your words, they are very valuable to me!
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*RowanLeeves Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome, glad it gave you a smile :) Writing is so precious.
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~Shussain86 Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, I would love to know your opinion about my another comparatively long poem "Swan" [link]
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Mood: Love ~Shussain86 Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks...!
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